Charlie II

Hey there SwallowedByInsanity! A piece of advice I've found that words are actually a lot stronger than sticks or stones in my experience. If this is something that you intend ...

Hey there t4yd3491 -- that's an interesting name you've got there to go with an interesting article! Structure To begin with, I know you're said this is just a snippet ...

I listen to this so much, it's unreal. I think my favourite has got to be the instrumental "Your hand in mine". That's lovely to work to, and even nicer ...

Hey Anoia, You've got an interesting start here -- a fantastic hook along with all the appropriate excitement and tension and action. It works well as a hook, but is ...

Hey Carlito! After reading this piece I have to say I'm confused. It's been almost a month and nobody seems to have reviewed this despite it being one of the ...

I think you're quite right, Mikko -- if the devil were like one book it would have to be by Dan Brown. Also this made me laugh a lot: Favorite ...

Hello again Mr Paul! Characters Ironically, though perhaps intentionally, there doesn't seem to be anything magnificent about Humphrey Wolf Adams so far! He's got the endearing "oh dear the family ...

I guess I'll call you Stela. :wink: Characterisation You did pretty well here, I think. Your main character is a little under-developed when you compare her to Harper -- I ...

Hey Laurence, Old people I like your portrayal of Pino. There's something quite difficult about writing a piece in the perspective of an older person, but I think you managed ...

I don't know how to write this review so I'm just going to let it all splurge out. I've got to be honest: I think you've written two poems. The ...

Hello again, Tinny -- I do hope you're still writing this: Ruby You're right -- it's not needed at the beginning. I think you know that though because of the ...

Ok I've decided to review both pieces here -- I hope that's alright! Ideas Aha -- here's an author who has a world in her head. :wink: I like how ...

Hey Azila -- here's my opinion! :) Dialogue This is generally good, especially this sentence: "Well, just watch out—that's quite a storm that's brewing.". It sounds natural and human, unlike ...

Hello Jas (and Tori!) -- I got your PM! :wink: As this is so short I think I'll just write what I feel about it rather than try and divide ...

Oh hello hipster! :wink: Perspective You've got the "teenage" part of the perspective down perfectly. I like the observations about the car and references to the instructor's car, etc. Furthermore ...